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Swift_Justice
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Subject: Crazy amount of mistakes in Loligo Caves
In the new Loligo Caves section on the dock area, there are a ton of typos.
It says, "There's a long decking out into the ocean and several other warriors stood around sorting out net's and fishing gear. Your quickly approached by a large man who look's you up and down before wandering past down the jetty...?"
ok....
1) it starts off with "there is", so it should be "stand" instead of "stood."
2) It says, "theres a long decking out into the ocean", but should probably say "a long decking GOING out into the ocean"
3) it should just be "nets" --> no apostrophe "s"
4) "Your quickly approached...etc." --> should be "you're", not "your"
5) "look's" --> once again, there should not be an apostrophe since it isnt talking about any form of posession
6) "before wandering down past the jetty...?" --> this doesnt really make sense... perhaps you could leave it as a period after the word "jetty" and continue with a sentence along the lines of "what could this mean?" If not that, get rid of the "...?" entirely and replace it with a period.

So...all in all, the grammar and spelling in this section needs some work. Sorry for such a long post XP

Time Posted: July 29 2008 09:22 pm EDT
Last updated: July 29 2008 09:22 pm EDT

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